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“ Ahhrrgg! Can’t I just go!? “ I screamed slamming the door, nearly knocking it off the hinges.  Screaming in a violent way, I could feel a fire starting deep down inside me.  Breathing deeply, anger swept through me almost making an earthquake. Knocking everything over that was in my way, I shout “ I want to go I MUST go! “ Breaking mums glass mug and shaking the dining table chairs, I storm away.  My face was now bright red and my fists were clenched, shaking, I ran into my purple bedroom and shut the door tightly, running, I jumped under the blankets! I feel so mad! And I guess the house looks like a mess, but I really want, I want be the best viking at the party!  I feel anger taking over me, rushing round, dragging me away!

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